Wednesday, February 23, 2011

Our Jelly Brain

What fantastic writers Room 20 are becoming. We have been learning to start our stories with a snappy hook in. Read some of these great brain stories from The Leopards writing group.
Disgusting! Mrs Woods brought a jelly brain. It was squashy. By Daniel

Gross jelly brain! Mrs Woods brought it. It is slimy. By Isaac

So yuk! It was a jelly brain. It was slimy and it was bumpy. I liked it and it was very gross. I didn't eat it because it was disgusting. By Emma

It was disgusting! Mrs Woods brought a jelly brain to school. It was very squashy. Our brain thinks very hard. By Joshua

The jelly was wobbly and it was soft. The red jelly tasted like coffee. By Tau

Lydia didn't finish her story but she had a wonderful start.
Oh no, don't eat it! Ther water went over...

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